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J. Lashley's avatar

It's great man; Sci fi doesn't seem like it gets much love from the poetry format so this is great to see.

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John Coon's avatar

Thank you!

I enjoy writing sci-fi poems. I'm happy you enjoyed this one. 😊

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A.C. Cargill, All-Human Author's avatar

Interesting rhyme scheme. Rather jerky reading, but that seems to add to the whole idea of the poem in an odd way.

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John Coon's avatar

I deliberately structured the language in the stanzas to have a deteriorating clone feel. Like there are obvious imperfections or flaws just like you'd have in a copy of a copy of an original.

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Nick Winney's avatar

I paticularly liked the way the language is a bit broken and abbreviated. it creates the sense (which i am sure is deliberate) that this was written by a clone of a clone of a clone etc and is iteratively degraded. but still the message is clear.

bleak.

Winner!

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John Coon's avatar

The rhyme and meter scheme are quite deliberate. I actually went and removed specific connecting words in some stanzas after completing my first draft because I wanted the poem itself to have a deteriorating clone feel to it.

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Nick Winney's avatar

and it worked really well!

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