I deliberately structured the language in the stanzas to have a deteriorating clone feel. Like there are obvious imperfections or flaws just like you'd have in a copy of a copy of an original.
I paticularly liked the way the language is a bit broken and abbreviated. it creates the sense (which i am sure is deliberate) that this was written by a clone of a clone of a clone etc and is iteratively degraded. but still the message is clear.
The rhyme and meter scheme are quite deliberate. I actually went and removed specific connecting words in some stanzas after completing my first draft because I wanted the poem itself to have a deteriorating clone feel to it.
It's great man; Sci fi doesn't seem like it gets much love from the poetry format so this is great to see.
Thank you!
I enjoy writing sci-fi poems. I'm happy you enjoyed this one. 😊
Interesting rhyme scheme. Rather jerky reading, but that seems to add to the whole idea of the poem in an odd way.
I deliberately structured the language in the stanzas to have a deteriorating clone feel. Like there are obvious imperfections or flaws just like you'd have in a copy of a copy of an original.
I paticularly liked the way the language is a bit broken and abbreviated. it creates the sense (which i am sure is deliberate) that this was written by a clone of a clone of a clone etc and is iteratively degraded. but still the message is clear.
bleak.
Winner!
The rhyme and meter scheme are quite deliberate. I actually went and removed specific connecting words in some stanzas after completing my first draft because I wanted the poem itself to have a deteriorating clone feel to it.
and it worked really well!